Example task & solution comment writing

Task: Comment writing – social media

Step 1:
Write a complete comment on the following task. Find at least four arguments supporting your opinion.

“Social media is everywhere. What would the world look like without.
Comment on whether a world without social media would be better.” 

Step 2:
Complete the following tasks so that you know what to include in a comment.

1. Go through the introduction. Highlight the hook, the way the opinion on the topic is given and the transition to the main body in green. 
2. In the main body find in each paragraph the topic sentence (red), the explanation (orange), the evidence/example (yellow) and the concluding sentence (pink) and highlight them accordingly.
3. In the conclusion, highlight the summary (blue) as well as the outlook (purple).
4. Write down all the connectors that were used.
5. Find expressions of impersonal language.

Step 3:
Work with the two texts.

1. Do the same tasks with your own text.
2. Compare your text with the sample solution. What is different? Is there anything you could improve?
3. Now rewrite your text and include the improvements.